Obsession
Alfred Dorn Sonnet2 sestets, couplet in the middlerhyme scheme: 1st sestet abcabc couplet - dd 2nd sestet efefefAs candles gently glow in amber light,the portrait, centered high, upon the wall,appears...
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Thanx for posting, Tamara. Interesting read!Some points.The second line of the couplet seems to be a little off meter. 'She appears only when he takes a drink.' It starts: SHE aPPEARS (ONly). Unless...
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Dear Dutch,Thank you for the critique.Yes, I see your point. The meter is off (not iambic pentameter). I'll have to work on these lines.I've only written 3 sonnets, including this one. Just trying to...
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Hi, Tamara,I'm not so familiar with this type of sonnet. It's interesting.The couplet is here right in the middle of the sonnet. This makes it pretty difficult to give it the same function as at the...
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TamaraAlso wondered about the couplet in the middle. If not for your interp, probably wouldn't have picked up on its real meaning. Think Dutch got all the metrical nits. I did wonder about'He sits...
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Dear Dutch,Yeah, I got lost in the story and actually forgotthe couplet should either moralize or generalize.The Alfred Dorn Sonnet was introduced by "The Formalist," a metrical poetry journal. Each...
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Yes, I just posted it on "Not Sonnets." I saw someone else had a villanelle there and I posted mine. Guess you can post ballades, sestinas, triolets and other forms on this board.This will really...
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Dear BrokenSword,Also wondered about the couplet in the middle. If not for your interp, probably wouldn't have picked up on its real meaning. Think Dutch got all the metrical nits. I did wonder...
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